Yet another simplistic but meaningful poem. "The Lonely Man's Derivative" What do you think?

A poem full of carefully measured (dare I say metered) torment, a reflection on disillusionment over life's trials which yet is forward-looking to ultimate redemption and restoration The juxtaposition of long and short lines gives the tone of afterthought and frustration tinged with deferred hope a temporal signature that makes your words memorable. I am not totally sold on some of your diction or semantic links, but they don't detract from your message. I would like to see you spend some time working on sharpening this poem's syntax and diction and then read your reposted version; it shows promise. Best wishes...